Novel in Progress/An Excerpt

Monday, May 25, 2009

It’s been a few years since they let the patients go—herded the inmates away in buses; slipped the loonies down the loop in cars; did not see the only escapee who shuffled straight to the river, crab walked the bogged banks, and paddled deep into the channel. So that she wasn’t found until three days later—a turtle egg in the nest of her hair, a chewed strip of rubber on her wrist. A child made the discovery. He’d been playing. He had thought at first that she was Galatea, the milk-white one in his book of myths. No one would believe him when he came shouting, spinning home—mud to his elbows, shoes undone.

“You leave your imagination out of this,” his mother said.

“I’m swearing,” he told his mother, crossing his heart.

8 comments:

Cynthia Pittmann said...

Attention grabbing selection...what curious imagery...turtle nest in her hair...it creates a water soaked feeling. I hope to read more. <3

Vivian Mahoney said...

Ooooo. This is so intriguing. Little children can be very perceptive. Will Greek myths come into play here?

Liviania said...

I like the mother-child interaction. I like that the myth protects the child from realizing how gruesome his discovery was.

kate hopper said...

You've got me, Beth.

Anonymous said...

Wonderful passage.

Woman in a Window said...

Is it wrong of me to really enjoy a turtle egg in the nest of her hair? Does that make me twisted? (don't answer that, k?)

Em said...

oh, chilling. And I love the picture that accompanies the excerpt.

Anna Lefler said...

Omigosh. Deliciously cold and troubling...

More, please...

;^) A.

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