Beautifying the Sentence: today is the day

National Novel Writing Month-ers, today is the day.  Send me your best revised sentence (the before and the after) from your NaNo novel and you will be entered into a contest to win either a signed galley of Small Damages (Philomel) or a signed copy of You Are My Only (Egmont USA). 

For details and for thoughts about what makes a good sentence, please go here.  The contest winner will be announced on Christmas Eve.